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| This is the pic I used for my 100 word challange. The 100 word challange is to right 100 words you wright 100 words with the prompt they give you .This years prompt was this pic.
once there lived a man called Tom also another called tony and last Bob they were at the beach fixing eggs and then Tony fixed the last egg done yeah when they were just gonna go the eggs cracked oh no Tony said we should leave Tom said lets investigate and Bob said lets eat no they did not agree what each other had said then they called their boss the boss said navigate and finally the all agreed and did their also got a treat chocolate then they growed old and had a happy life and then died happy.
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Wednesday 11 June 2014
100 word challange
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Hi Lorna-Jay. I enjoyed visiting your blog and looking at some of your other posts . . .great video! Your blog is well planned, nicely organised and welcoming and I think your writing needs little bit of similar attention! Have a look at the beginning - how could you have grabbed the reader's attention more successfully? How about describing the place they were inand the job they were doing? Or even begin with some direct speech? The reader would quickly get a good feel for the story to come. Mr Mullard (Team 100WC)
ReplyDeleteThankyou for the comment and I will try do those things next time and use them
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