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Friday 19 June 2015

Week 9 poetry

WALT: We are learning to use descriptive language to create a picture in the reader’s head. Brainstorm using the padlet (password is home) ideas about ‘where you are from’ using the five senses: look, feel, smell, taste and hear. Write your poem here: Blooming trees big bees plants surrounding safe and sound wind flowing trees blowing warm blankets all around rocks near islands big fig trees little warm bees and that is where I'm from. This poem means a lot to me and this explains where I am from and what it is like there and I am very proud of where I live this poem is a very exiting poem.

Wednesday 10 June 2015

Information report week8

We are learning to write an information report about a topic related to space. j

By Friday 5 June you need to have written and edited your information report on a topic related to space so that it is ready to be published.

Here are some ideas to writej
  • Jupiter
  • Astronauts
  • Earth    
  • The Moon
  • Eclipses
  • Stars

My topic is:
Neptune


You need to attend one workshop with the teacher on an area that you feel you need help with for your writing. Here is the timetable where you will make your bookings. There is space for seven people in each workshop so book in quickly to make sure there is space!

Start researching and plan your writing here: (remember to write notes in your plan). Click here to see an exemplar of a plan.

Introduction:   Neptune is a big small
Main idea:
Size
More detail:

Neptune is not very big.
More detail:
Neptune is a bit small.
Main idea:
How far is it from the sun
More detail:
Neptune is the the last planet from the Sun.
More detail:
Neptune Is the furthest from the sun and it is the last to orbit the sun.
Main idea:
Why Neptune  rolls forward.
More detail:
Scientists believe that an asteroid crashed into neptune and that is why it rolls forward.
More detail:
Since the asteroid  crashed into neptune it cause Neptune to roll forward instead of going round in a circle.


Success Criteria for writing. Click here to see an exemplar of an information report about Mars.

Level 3
Student Targets:
Yes!
Audience and Purpose
  • Identify my audience and purpose for writing.
Content/Ideas
  • Write clearly and include all important information.
  • Add factual detail to expand my ideas.
Structure: including punctuation and grammar
  • Use different sentence starters.
  • Join some ideas using conjunctions such as: when, while, after, since, until, if, because, although, that
  • Organise my ideas into paragraphs and sequence my ideas so that my writing flows.
  • Use subheadings for each new paragraph to tell the reader what it is about
  • Check that I am writing in the present tense (for example: the sun is a ball of fire; the stars are shooting through the sky)
  • Use a range of punctuation correctly.    (.,?!)
Editing
  • Identify and correct most spelling errors.
  • Improve my writing so that it is more enjoyable/informative for the reader.


Start your writing here:

Introduction
Did you ever wonder about Neptune? And why it rolls forward well now is the time to learn about the fantastic Neptune .Hope you enjoy this report!

Size
Neptune is not a very big planet.Just because Neptune is   a gas giant like Saturn and Jupiter  it is a really small gas giant it’s diameter is only 49,500 km so it’s really small considering it’s a gas giant.




Why neptune rolls forward
A lot of scientists say that Neptune rolls forward because an asteroid crashed into Neptune and from then on neptune was caused to roll forward instead of around the sun and now Neptune can not help itself but roll forward to orbit the Sun.

Other interesting facts about Neptune
Neptunes clouds take eighteen hours to rotate because Neptune is not a solid body.Neptune has fourteen moons that orbit it.Neptune is the most dense,Neptune is bigger than Earth.

Neptunes rings
Guess what Neptunes rings are most likely made out of  of ice mixed with dust and grain and . Neptunes rings are not as bright as Saturn’s rings. Neptune has four rings and one of Neptune’s moon is called triton Neptunes rings are named


Neptunes names in other cultures
Did you know Neptune was named after the roman god of the sea.Neptune's name in welsh is Neifion and Neptune’s name in portuguese is Netuno. Neptune’s name in hindi is varun,In italian Neptune’s name is Nenzia .In maori Neptune's name is Tangaroa.
What Neptune is like
Neptune is a very windy planet The wind speeds on Neptune so as we can see here Neptune is a very cold planet. Neptunes winds are so cold that they can get up to 1,500 miles per hour.


What did people think Neptune was
Before when nobody knew about Neptune Galileo thought that it was a discounted Star so as we can see hare nobody really knew that Neptune was a planet. and know Neptune is a Planet.

Conclusion
That is all the facts about Neptune and it’s wonderful planet  hope you enjoyed the information report all about Neptune.